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The best way to travel in a foreign city is by using public transportation. What is your opinion?

#travel #city #transportation
Nowadays, most
of
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the
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people
 love to
travel
in
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 a foreign
city
.
People
 can see beautiful sceneries that do not have in their own
city
.
For example
,
peoples
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people
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 from Kuala Lumpur get to see
a beautiful sandy beaches
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a beautiful sandy beach
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 in Langkawi. There are a lot of ways that
people
 can
use
 to
travel
 around
the
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a
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 foreign
city
.
People
 can
use
 private
transportation
 or
a
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public
transportation
. In my opinion, the best way to
travel
 around
the
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 foreign
city
 is by using public
transportation
. On one hand,
people
 that love
use
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 private
transportation
 to
travel
 around
the
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 foreign country have their own valid reason. By using private
transportation
, they can
plans
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 the journey by themselves.
For instance
, they can plan the exact
time
 they want to leave or going back to the place that they stay.
In addition
,
travel
 by private
transportation
 is more comfortable than public
transport
. Some
people
 need
a
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comfortable
places
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place
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 while travelling.
For example
, elderly
people
 and pregnant women need a comfortable place so that they can enjoy the view while travelling with other family members.
Furthermore
,
people
 who
use
 private
transportation
 get to save a lot of
time
. They can reduce their travelling
time
 and do not have to wait for public
transport
 to arrive.
On the other hand
, my personal view on travelling around
the
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 foreign
city
 by public
transport
 is
people
 can save a lot of money.
This
 is because
,
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 fee for
the
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public
transportation
cheaper
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 than private
transportation
. Fees for public
transportation
 in Malaysia are around RM 3 to RM 10. The journey fee always depends on their own destination.
Moreover
,
people
 can prevent
from
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air pollution if they
travel
 by public
transport
, which is
less
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fewer
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 chemical substances like carbon monoxide are
produce
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.
This
 chemical substance is bad for the environment and could lead to
the
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global warming. Other than that, travelling by public
transport
 can help
people
 to be more independent.
People
 who are
travel
 by public
transport
 need to know their own route and which station should they go
but
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also
 when is the exact
time
 they need to be at the station. In conclusion, I believe that
travel
 by public
transport
 is more adventurous and fun rather than private
transportation
.
However
,
people
 need to know the consequences that they may face while travelling by using public
transport
 or private
transportation
.
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