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The best way to travel in a foreign city is by using public transportation. What is your opinion?

#travel #city #transportation
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Nowadays, most
of
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the
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people
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 love to
travel
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in
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 a foreign
city
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.
People
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 can see beautiful sceneries that do not have in their own
city
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.
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,
peoples
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people
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 from Kuala Lumpur get to see
a beautiful sandy beaches
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a beautiful sandy beach
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 in Langkawi. There are a lot of ways that
people
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 can
use
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 to
travel
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 around
the
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a
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 foreign
city
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.
People
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 can
use
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 private
transportation
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 or
a
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public
transportation
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. In my opinion, the best way to
travel
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 around
the
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 foreign
city
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 is by using public
transportation
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. On one hand,
people
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 that love
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use
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 private
transportation
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 to
travel
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 around
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 foreign country have their own valid reason. By using private
transportation
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, they can
plans
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 the journey by themselves.
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, they can plan the exact
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 they want to leave or going back to the place that they stay.
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,
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 by private
transportation
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 is more comfortable than public
transport
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. Some
people
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 need
a
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comfortable
places
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place
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 while travelling.
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, elderly
people
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 and pregnant women need a comfortable place so that they can enjoy the view while travelling with other family members.
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,
people
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 who
use
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 private
transportation
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 get to save a lot of
time
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. They can reduce their travelling
time
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 and do not have to wait for public
transport
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 to arrive.
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, my personal view on travelling around
the
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 foreign
city
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 by public
transport
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 is
people
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 can save a lot of money.
This
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,
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 fee for
the
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public
transportation
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cheaper
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 than private
transportation
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. Fees for public
transportation
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 in Malaysia are around RM 3 to RM 10. The journey fee always depends on their own destination.
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,
people
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 can prevent
from
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air pollution if they
travel
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 by public
transport
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, which is
less
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fewer
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 chemical substances like carbon monoxide are
produce
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.
This
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 chemical substance is bad for the environment and could lead to
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global warming. Other than that, travelling by public
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 can help
people
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 to be more independent.
People
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 who are
travel
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 by public
transport
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 need to know their own route and which station should they go
but
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also
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 when is the exact
time
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 they need to be at the station. In conclusion, I believe that
travel
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 by public
transport
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 is more adventurous and fun rather than private
transportation
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.
However
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,
people
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 need to know the consequences that they may face while travelling by using public
transport
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 or private
transportation
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.
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