The widespread use of the internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems connected with using the web? what solutions can you suggest?

In the
last
decade, the global society has been attracted by the popularity of digital
media
. Some opine that the easier
an
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individuals accessing their social
media
accounts, the greater negative impacts they will obtain.
This
essay will discuss several issues caused by the website and how the members of society can address
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these problems

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.
First
and foremost, human psychology experts are concerned that people who
has
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spent more than a half of their day to surf the Internet using their gadgets
,
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are deemed to experience mental health issue.
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, most elementary students in Indonesia has been given
an
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authority by their parents to use numerous kind of high-technology devices and create a social
media
account. As a consequence, they tend to stay active in their Instagram or Facebook accounts every single day and create digital content
in
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every
second
,
although
they have other important responsibilities to do. These
phenomenon
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lead to the appearance of depression and anxiety that
felt
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by
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a juvenile
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juvenile
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.
However
, there are several measures
can
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be taken to overcome
this
issue.
Firstly
, parents need to be more active in controlling their children daily activities.
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, when the
first
time the youth are exposed to
the
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social
media
, it is better to set the limit of the digital network access time,
such
as not more than an hour per day.
Thus
, the youngster can manage their daily screen period and reducing the possibility of damaging their well-being.
Secondly
, the government
also
can promote a new campaign related to outdoor activities since it influences all
member
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of communities in the region to not highly attach to
the
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technology and the digital world.
This
movement will be beneficial not only physically but
also
mentally. To conclude
then
,
eventhough
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even though

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there are a number of drawbacks
as a result
of the modern era, I personally believe that
this problems
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can be
tackle
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easily by improving
the
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family supervision and initiate a national healthy campaign.

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