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The idea of having a single career is becoming old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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It is often considered that having several jobs make
life
 easier and
also
 earns
money
 at present when compared with
past
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the past
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.
This
 statement has both significant reasons which will be
dicussed
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discussed
 in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, In
this
 contemporary era, One's
life
 revolves around
money
 where finding
job
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a job
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 has become difficult. As
population
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the population
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 is increasing day by day, unemployment has inclined all around the globe.
However
, At
this
 time, to have a better
life
,
career
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a career
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 should be improved.
Moreover
,In the past, As the
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 are more but the
people
 who were interested to set their careers are
less
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fewer
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. At that time,
single
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a single
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 job was sufficient to lead a family.
In addition
, Currently, due to
increase
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the increase
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 in necessities,
cost
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the cost
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 of living
money
 plays a key role. So, having two or more
career
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 helps us to improve the way we live.
For instance
, My cousin is working as a coder in a company along with
this
 she is
also
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working
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woking
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working
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 in
insurance
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the insurance
an insurance
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 company as a part-timer.
Furthermore
, she has both incomes which
helps
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help
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to
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her to
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 have a better
life
 in Canada.
Thus
, having two or more jobs in
this
 present situation is a great idea. Whereas, It has some disadvantages too that there will be
disturbance
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a disturbance
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 in
work
-
life
 balance which leads to problems at home along with
this
 concentration towards the
work
 decreases.
Although
,
money
 makes us happy
but
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life
 becomes boring as we
focus
 more on our
work
 rather than developing relations.
For instance
, when we observe affluent families, most
people
 are busy with their
work
 in which relations between the parents and children will get
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affected
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effected
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affected
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. They mostly
focus
 on their careers rather than developing the attachments between the family members. While
,
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 some
people
focus
 on education too along with the
career
 which is
also
 better idea where it helps to develop in their jobs. Despite
this
, education does not
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 one's
career
 as it helps to improve the future. In conclusion, At present,
career
 is crucial but along with
this
 health is
also
 important. So,
People
 who are stable mentally and good
in
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at
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 multitasking can
focus
 on maintaining two careers in their
life
 whereas, it does not suit
to
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the
people
 who can concentrate on the only
work
.
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