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Some university now offer their courses on internet so that people can study online.Is it a positive or negative development?

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The current tertiary institutions offer virtual learning to their students to allow
continuation
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 of education.
To begin
 with,the presence of the current pandemic has escalated the need
of
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 minimal personal contact,
therefore
 encouraging the need
of
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for
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 internet
connectivity
 to allow people to maintain social distance.
In addition
, online classes enable tertiary institutions to have several classes at the same time despite
long
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distance
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.
Moreover
, online classes
has
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enable
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 efficient communication between students and their lectures easily.
Thus
, virtual
lessions
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lessons
sessions
 provide
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an efficient
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efficient
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 and convince way of learning.
On the contrary
, online learning is expensive in terms of buying data bundles that will be necessary during communication.
However
, internet
connectivity
 is
also
 a challenge in some parts of the country making learning difficult.
Thus
, network
connectivity
 is a major issue in making virtual learning successful. In summary, technological development has
enable
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 virtual learning to be relevant in the present generation; Despite challenges with internet
connectivity
.
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