Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Online shopping is increasing at a high rate, with the passage of time. People fond of buying their Groceries,Books and Travel tickets are
also
purchased online.
This
new trend of shopping has more advantages than disadvantages in human life and totally changed the style of shopping as compared to the past few decades. Purchasing things online through the internet is popular
,
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because
one
can get varieties of products and
also
compare the product prices on different websites using the internet.
Moreover
, due to development in technology many websites now allow priority
one
day delivery on their products for the better experience of their customers.
For instance
,recently Amazon started their
one
-day prime delivery for their prime customers,by
this
new priority delivery, Amazon increased their sales by 50
percent
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. Whereas in online shopping buying sunglasses is a big challenge but now it is solved by Lenskart developed
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software which creates an image of their customer wearing a particular product to choose which
one
is best so by all
this
new innovation online shopping is reducing their barriers.
On the other hand
,everything had
their
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positive and negative impacts. Sometimes purchasing products online is not genuine. There are replicas of certain kinds of
product
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products

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in the market. Whereas online shopping
also
reduces the demand
of
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local groceries stores and reduces
employment
.
For instance
,
a
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research conducted in 2017 in India states that around
60percent
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a 60percent

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of people of India chose to do shopping online.
Furthermore
,
this
research
also
states that by
this
trend of shopping local market suffers and
employment
level is
also
reducing.So they directly or indirectly affect the
employment
rate in the country. To conclude, online shopping is
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freeway of shopping but
one
cannot neglect that doing online shopping reduces the
employment
of the country as well.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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