At the present time, the population of some countries include relative large numbers of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give the reasons for your answer and include any relative examples from your own knowledge or experiences.
In certain countries, it is true that teenagers become more populated than elders.
Although
there are various benefits to having much more younger people
compared to the figure of elder
population, some negative issues needed to be considered, which will Add an article
the elder
further
be discussed at both points in the following essay.
On the one hand, there are numerous advantages of elder
population being less than of young adults. Add an article
the elder
First
of all, teenagers are the strong power of human
to improve their country in better ways by using their adaptable and distinguish ideas with Fix the agreement mistake
humans
new
Add an article
a new
perspective
that Fix the agreement mistake
perspectives
many
older Change the quantifier
much
adult
could not apply. Learning to modern technologies is Fix the agreement mistake
adults
a
main problem to some elders who could not follow up-to-date trends about technology, Change the article
the
for example
, computers and AI. Apart from this
, another points
is more creative thinking and having happier life from their own experience. Take a gap year is a good example which Fix the agreement mistake
point
stand
for exploring the world to have sufficient passions to come back and try to do something better in their life Change the verb form
stands
not
like other elders who Add the comma(s)
,not
usually
strict in their rules and only think about works and promotion.
Despite the positives to many younger Add a missing verb
are usually
people
in
, some negative aspects need to consider. Change preposition
apply
To begin
, young matures have more oppotunities
to commit crimes, Correct your spelling
opportunities
for instance
, robbery and shoplifter. This
because
some follow bad behaviour from their role models, parents and friends. According to in Thailand, many criminals are mostly under 25 years old. Add a missing verb
is because
Secondly
, there are less
sender messages from older Change the quantifier
fewer
people
, resulting in lack
of traditional culture. Some ancient cultural traditions which stay in Correct article usage
a lack
the
long time Change the article
a
cound
not survive in the present days without them Correct your spelling
could
such
as memorable stories in great
holiday called Song Grant Day which show respect to their own relatives.
In conclusion, even though there are numerous benefits to Add an article
a great
population
of young adults becoming higher than Add an article
the population
number
of older Change the article
a number
the number
people
, it also
brings some demerits to this
as well. The countries would be developed by far better compared with these days by some younger people
with new creation while many older people
fail to do it. Therefore
, I believe that there are more beneficial than bad points.Submitted by ploy_41 on
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