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Some people say that children no longer need to go to school since everything can be learned online. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some think that
children
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 need not go to
school
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 cause everything can
study
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 on the
internet
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. I personally believe that I disagree with
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 opinion. There are many reasons that I cannot agree. Everything which people want to know is always on the
internet
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. They just fill what thing they want in Google, Coccoc, Chrom, etc. There are lots of information sources that they can choose from.
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, many sources are not exact and unauthentic so it is really dangerous if
children
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 cannot select.
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, each website that provides information usually has advertisements to maintain the activity of the web. It is so unsafe that
children
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 can
study
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 well.
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 that, many life knowledge which can
study
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 in some lessons in
school
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 are learned by teachers. If
children
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 do not go to
school
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, that will become a disadvantage for them.
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,
children
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 cannot
study
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 many experiences like skills in tests, tips to deal with the hard lesson, tips to choose the exact answers with less time, etc. When they get to learn at home with a computer, they will become lonely and isolated which can make them more and more inactive and get autism. While their
study
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 is depending on the
internet
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, they are really easy to entice to go to black way like games addiction, Facebook addiction, etc. So parents must attract attention to their
children
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 when they get to learn on the
internet
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 to prevent dangerous and unauthentic information.
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, many people advise that parents should give their
children
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 to
school
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 to get safe, benefits and exact knowledge. In conclusion, I believe that education in
school
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 is always better than online learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized education
  • flexible learning pace
  • peer pressure
  • social development
  • diverse range of ideas
  • comprehensive education
  • specialized educators
  • extracurricular activities
  • traditional schools
  • structured environment
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