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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education
 forms a distinct line of separation between man and any other creatures on the earth so
education
 is a very important tool for our bright future. Some people believe that
children
 should start
education
 at a very early
age
 to get numerous success doors
however
 I believe toddler should begin schooling at least at
age
 of 6 or 7.
First
 of all, in
this
 world everybody having cut-throat competition while they start their school or can say they step out for a new journey of life as
education
 so I believe try to avoid excessive pressure on kids while they are too small.
Furthermore
, parents are the
first
 teachers of any kid so parents always give ethical
education
 to their
children
 before schooling in
this
 case at the
age
 of 7 they can start the formal training. Even though parents should need time to spend with their
children
 so that they can understand them properly before schooling.
On the other hand
, few people argued that discipline in life is a significant role so juveniles always get from the teachers properly
instead
 of guardians.
Moreover
, at
such
 a very young
age
 child
age
children
 can get success if they start learning at an early
age
 which is a key process of a bright future. Some people believe as long as
children
 get their ethical and moral learning they should start their formal studies. Overall it can be observed from the above discussion that minors should start
education
 after the
age
 of 6 or 7 not at a very early
age
 though.
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