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Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems , while others think celebrities make the problems less important.discuss both views and give your opinion .

#people #support #aid #organizations #attention #celebrities
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People
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 have different views about well-known
people
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's support towards international
aid
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 organizations. While some
people
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 think celebrities make the problems less important and bring counterproductive results, I believe that support of celebrities will create public awareness about the problems that need to be dealt with and has a hugely positive effect on the whole society. From my point of view, famous
people
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's association with international
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 organisations can raise public awareness towards certain matters of importance. Since
people
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 tend to listen to whom they admire, famous
people
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 can positively encourage their fans to participate in charitable activities held by the organisations. Many superstar' fans turn their attention to the problems
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 as poverty and engage themselves in voluntary work for a variety of global
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 organisations. So a wider range of population can be reached if an organisation's campaign is represented by a popular star.
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, I can understand the arguments against the support of celebrities. The main reason for
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 view is that the public might take the presence of famous entertainers as a mere publicity stunt. Famous stars may fail to draw the attention of
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 to the situation, without the evidence of real actions taken to mitigate a problem. Another possible reason for
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 opinion is that when relying on the fame of some stars to attract more public attention, an
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 programme can
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 be affected by their possible scandals
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 as receiving a speeding ticket or getting caught using illegal drugs. In conclusion,
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 the involvement of superstars in global
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 organizations will have some negative impacts on society, it seems to me that their actions will bring more positive changes to the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • international aid organizations
  • public awareness
  • amplify
  • advocacy
  • systemic change
  • oversimplification
  • trivialization
  • undermining
  • severity
  • misinformed advocacy
  • distorts
  • hamper
  • guided by experts
  • constructive
  • strategically
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