In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What are the main causes and what measures could be taken to solve these problems?

In several nations, the average mass of humans is raising and
healhtiness
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healthiness
and wellness are
diminshing
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diminishing
. In my opinion, there
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two main reasons
such
as lifestyle and
fastfood
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fast food
fast-food
eating habits.
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rise
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in obesity, before proposing two possible solutions.
First
and foremost, the most important cause of increasing
weight
of
people
is
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a fast-paced world.Because the advent of the internet and technology has
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our life so much.
Therefore
people
need to
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every possible hour to not left behind
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.
As a
result
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people
go on
fastfood
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fast food
which has rich fat
cybohydrate
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carbohydrate
carbohydrates
, rather than cooking food.
Secondly
, jobs are becoming desk-bound and limited
physicall
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physical
activity.
However
, there are two promising solutions to
this
problem.
First
of all,
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government
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health
care should
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give small attention to prevent gaining
weight
.
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give voucher or appeal
who
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attends
fittness
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fitness
or yoga class.
This
would more
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attractive
attracted
people
in
exersice
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exercise
and
eventually
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average
people
weight
will decrease.
Secondly
,
people
need to know
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today
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healthy dishes are actually fast as
fastfoods
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fast foods
.If
human
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consume
well balanced
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nutrions
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nutrition
nutrients
they will lose
weight
and stay fit even they
dont
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don't
exersice
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exercise
often. In conclusion,21
centry
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century
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is
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problem in many
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because of
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world.
Although
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govermant
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government
governments
and
people
needs
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to pay attention to
weight
and lifestyle
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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