In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What are the main causes and what measures could be taken to solve these problems?

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In several nations, the average mass of humans is raising and

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healthiness

and wellness are

diminshing

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diminishing

. In my opinion, there

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two main reasons

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in obesity, before proposing two possible solutions.

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and foremost, the most important cause of increasing

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people

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our life so much.

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every possible hour to not left behind

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people

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which has rich fat

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of all,

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give small attention to prevent gaining

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exercise

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average

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will decrease.

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people

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need to know

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healthy dishes are actually fast as

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consume

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nutrions

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nutrition

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they will lose

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and stay fit even they

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don't

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exercise

often. In conclusion,21

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to pay attention to

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and lifestyle

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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213 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What are the main causes and what measures could be taken to solve these problems?

Fully explain your ideas

It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. How could robot be used in the future? Will this be a positive or a negative development?

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Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon

In many places, people's lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships.