Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

It has been suggested that
topic
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for discussion, the poor from various
countries
should be accepted to
work
by the wealthy
countries
. As a matter of fact, in
this
day and ,age there is most without employment and poor
people
in different areas. I am of the opinion that developing
countries
mustn't be forced to admit other
countries
'
people
to
work
.
First
of all, both international and national declarations have been shown that each country ought to establish positive and large chances
to
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their nation,
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they are able to accept in overseas
people
. Recently, in fact, more employment, business others can't tolerate
work
conditions so the
government
makes an effort to supply their
people
with jobs. What is more, if local
people
support they will admire their
government
and will support them, a local human will commence
to inhabit
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better than the foreign, the quantity of the without jobs will drop to almost minimum. Briefly, I believe that the
government
has got a basic obligation, to equip folk.
On the other hand
, local
people
have accustomed to various demands
for example
already they know living conditions, outlays,income, the rules of the legislation and so on. As well, they have got certain opportunities, the resource and so on. I consider that folk have got high
work
experience than an overseas human. I have read that from blogs and
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social media, some verdicts have been confirmed by the
government
that they will not accept a foreign person. Taking into consideration, every
government
has got a debt or a duty, to enforce
work
plans or measures for their
countries
. Any
countries
haven't got so obligation
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