Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To whant extant do you agree with this statement

It is true that affluence in the modern world is not the way to a happy life. There are a lot
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if
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complexities and troubles.
To begin
with, when we talk about life
such
as a lengthy process, we need to keep in mind lots
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such
as wellness, relatives and time. There are items we cannot purchase. Money, unquestioningly, may give us many capabilities in
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life.
However
, it is not almighty.
Happiness
for everyone is expressed in different ways.
For example
, my best friend wants to move into Canada and
that is
her
happiness
and affluence
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help her dream comes true. While my other friend is grieving for his dead father and richness can not help him, since it is impossible.
Besides
, wealth turns a lot of people lonely, because they
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comprehend that most of humanity is greedy and stingy.
Therefore
, nobody wants to be friends with a person, but most of them want to be friends with someone else's wallet.
This
fact turns a rich person into a disappointed affluent.
Thus
, there can not be any questions about
happiness
. To sum up, wealth is an ambiguous thing and it does not bring
happiness
to everyone, because all of us have our own different goals
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