It is important that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important for all the
people
in
this
world to accept
people
of other countries and cultures. And I think that
this
acceptance should be taught to
children
from a young age.Some
people
are of the opinion that
children
with various abilities and social backgrounds should study together at the same school. In my opinion,
this
is a very good idea and it can be very beneficial for the
children
.The following paragraphs will discuss both views in detail and will
also
justify my opinion.
Children
must learn that the world is like a family and everyone is an important part of it. By allowing
children
belonging to different social backgrounds to mix with each other will help to develop an open mindset in them . They will learn to be more tolerant and accepting
to
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people
who have a different belief system and traditional
value
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than them and
this
can really
useful
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for their future life.
For instance
, my brother completed his education in an international which had
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a student
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student
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students
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from all over the world. And because of
this
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he has grown
to
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a very patient and understanding adult. Everyone has a different level of intelligence and skill set and
this
is true in
case
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of
children
also
. I strongly believe that
children
should never be compared to each
because
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of it.Studying in a school with
people
having different talents helps
children
understand that no one is good at everything but there is always something that a person is better at as compared to others.
This
teaches
children
to respect other's abilities even if they are different
than
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themselves and
also
if it is an ability not common in
the
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society. He/she should not be treated differently because of
this
.
For instance
, there could a
student
who is a very good painter but he/she could be extremely bad at studies and does not get good grades.
Such
a
student
should never be looked down upon because even though he/she can't study well, the
student
can go on to become a great artist. To conclude , sending
children
to schools with
people
from a range of different social backgrounds and various talents can teach them a lot of important life lessons.It will help
to
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become an
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adult who respects
people
with different skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promotes Inclusivity
  • Fosters Equality
  • Appreciate Diversity
  • Equitable Society
  • Broad Perspective
  • Problem-solving Skills
  • Real-World Diversity
  • Navigate
  • Global Society
  • Strive for Improvement
  • Unique Talents
  • Healthy Competitive Spirit
  • Reduce Social Inequality
  • Access to Resources
  • Empathy
  • Social Skills
  • Communication
  • Teamwork
  • Conflict Resolution
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