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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

It is undeniable that nowadays, Internet
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 an important role
on
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 human activities
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 as reading, learning and communicating. Many
people
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 think that in the future,
people
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 will not buy printing
media
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such
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 as newspapers or
books
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 because they can read everything from online
media
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 without paying. From my point of view, I disagree whit
this
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 idea for many reasons, outlined in the following paragraph. On the one hand, some
people
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 think that online
media
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 has the influence factors on deciding to buy printing
media
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 because it is convenient for everyone in modern society.
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, many students are using some technology
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 as
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 and computers for lecturing, reading and writing on their education without paying. Another reason is that using online
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 can help reduce waste caused by paper. In
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other word,
people
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 in modern society are adapting some
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activities
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 to be friendly
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environment
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.
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, I think that reading
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 on online
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,
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 information on
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 without expert examination which is different from the newspapers or
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 that always has to examined before publication.
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, many
people
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 claim that they cannot find some
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 in online
media
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, for it has copyright from
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 so they are deciding to buy these
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. Another reason is that
people
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 who spend more time
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reading online can cause unhealthy problems for their eyes.
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, many
children
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 in Thailand often are reading a
book
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 on Ipad or laptop, as the result, they often have eyes problems than
children
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 who read from real
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.
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, many parents often are using real
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 for teaching or entertaining
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their
children
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 rather than online
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 when their
children
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 begin to understand some
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. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
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 viewpoint because reading
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 from real
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,
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is reliable rather than information on online
media
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, and it does not their
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unhealthy
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.
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 I disagree with
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 point, reading
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book
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books
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 on online
media
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 can cause
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 positive environment and positive effect on human activities in
community
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the community
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.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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