Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is undeniable that advertising
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an important role
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deciding to buy some product or some service, while
people
think that advertisements are not attracting
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of their deciding to buy goods. In the following paragraph, both views of
this
topic will be outlined in the detail. It is true to say that one of the
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a decision
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decision
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to buy something is advertising because it is
marketing
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a marketing
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strategy
that is
making
people
know about information
such
as
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and price of products or services before deciding to buy.
For example
, advertisements from
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local
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in
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newspaper
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that put intensive data about decreasing of fruit in
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the shop
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.
This
potentially motivates us to buy fruit where they are advertised.
Additionally
,
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advertisements
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are
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important for most companies, for they can get a lot of money from advertising
such
as cars advertisement on television
that is
the most popular and the most
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announcement. Customers are often trusting information
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is advertise
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by television.
On the contrary
, some
people
think that advertising from many media is not attracting attention to everyone in modern society.
For instance
, many
people
are disregarding junk mails that are introducing
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of goods every day.
Furthermore
, advertising is often criticized as misleading for unnecessary
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,
such
as black Friday where
people
often spend a lot of money
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advertised goods rather than want they need. In conclusion, I believe that
advertisement
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advertisements
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have both positive impacts and negative impacts on purchasing of
people
.
Therefore
, it is recommended that everyone should not trust the words in an announcement until they see it with their own eyes and touch it with their own hands.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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