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Some people state that the national teams and an individual sportsman and sportswomen should be financially sponsored by the government or non-government body. how far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Although
, many people believe that government and private firms should support economically to national sports representative of the country is convincing. I think in a reverse manner and agree to the given statement. My inclination is justified in the ensuing paragraphs. Out of all the arguments of financially support to the sportsperson, the strongest
one
 to prove my view is talented athletes sometimes don't have money to train his self for competition and
also
 he has the responsibility of the family. If he supported by some funds from the bodies it would remove the stress of his family responsibility and he could concentrate more on his performance. A good example of
this
 is Akila Dhananjay, who is a cricketer of the
SriLankan
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 team and he has not been able to join the academy due to the financial status of his family.
One
 day
one
 of the Srilankan players Mahila Jayawardene saw him playing in small groups and he felt that
this
 boy has a load of talent. After that's he picked up him and introduced him
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 the Sri Lankan national team. Today he is known as the best spinner
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 the Srilankan team.
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this
, it is
also
 true that if a person
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other
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than
that
 person with his
his
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economic status
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people would remember his help and if he becomes famous for on
one
 day he would always give person name who helps him to become
this
. And
this
 is nothing but
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 from god and it would help more than anything in life.
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, to wrap up the discussion, it can be said that despite
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helping
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in their difficult times,
also
 helping him some funding is it will as good as helping someone who has no food to ear.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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