Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common . What do you think are the causes of this ? What solutions can you suggest ?

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problems are ubiquitous these days.

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stress related

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sicknesses including longer working hours and

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mental health of an individual. It will

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provide solutions to these issues by suggesting ways to improve

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's work-life balance and

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how to mitigate tension that arises out of increasing job pressure. Modern

day working

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professionals are stretching their working hours.

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, the psychological pressure arising out of

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is immense which they generally ignore. People nowadays, aspire to become young achievers and the road to success is taking up diverse job responsibilities within a stipulated timeline than what is required and

this

eventually leads to anxiety for them.

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, CEO's at startups who are in their early 30's are pushing beyond their limits to attract investors who can fund their ideas. Indeed, working overtime and the mental

stress

arising due to overburdening with job responsibilities can take a severe

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on the health of an individual. In some professions, working remotely can eliminate the commute

time

to work. Utilizing the same

time

to focus on

one

's mental health can mitigate

stress related

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sicknesses. The

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it requires to travel to

office

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is mostly redundant and

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, companies are now encouraging work from home policies for their employees and are

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conducting live yoga and meditation classes for them.

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, working remotely and ensuring a regular practice of

stress relieving

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activities can keep a person healthy. To conclude, it is quite common nowadays to see people suffering from

stress

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discussed how stretching

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's working hours and not ensuring mental well-being can inflict damaging consequences to

one

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Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common . What do you think are the causes of this ? What solutions can you suggest ?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

The number of endangered species has increased significantly in this century and we find more mass extinctions in this period than in any other period of time. State some reasons for this and provide possible solutions.

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone(cellphone)apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?