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Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common . What do you think are the causes of this ? What solutions can you suggest ?

#stress #illnesses
Stress related
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 problems are ubiquitous these days.
This
 essay will discuss the main reasons
of
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stress related
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 sicknesses including longer working hours and
deteriorating
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the deteriorating
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 mental health of an individual. It will
also
 provide solutions to these issues by suggesting ways to improve
one
's work-life balance and
to
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how to mitigate tension that arises out of increasing job pressure. Modern
day working
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 professionals are stretching their working hours.
Also
, the psychological pressure arising out of
this
 is immense which they generally ignore. People nowadays, aspire to become young achievers and the road to success is taking up diverse job responsibilities within a stipulated timeline than what is required and
this
 eventually leads to anxiety for them.
For example
, CEO's at startups who are in their early 30's are pushing beyond their limits to attract investors who can fund their ideas. Indeed, working overtime and the mental
stress
 arising due to overburdening with job responsibilities can take a severe
till
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 on the health of an individual. In some professions, working remotely can eliminate the commute
time
 to work. Utilizing the same
time
 to focus on
one
's mental health can mitigate
stress related
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 sicknesses. The
time
 it requires to travel to
office
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the office
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 is mostly redundant and
therefore
, companies are now encouraging work from home policies for their employees and are
also
 conducting live yoga and meditation classes for them.
Thus
, working remotely and ensuring a regular practice of
stress relieving
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 activities can keep a person healthy. To conclude, it is quite common nowadays to see people suffering from
stress
.
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 essay
,
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 discussed how stretching
one
's working hours and not ensuring mental well-being can inflict damaging consequences to
one
.
This
 essay
also
 suggested that the solutions to
this
 problem are twofold: cutting down on unwanted commute
time
 to work and inculcate stressbuster activities regularly in
one
's day to day routine.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • job demands
  • work-related stress
  • societal pressure
  • achieve success
  • erosion
  • work-life balance
  • exposure
  • negative news
  • social media comparisons
  • chronic stress
  • mental health support
  • stigma
  • flexible work hours
  • stress management techniques
  • mindfulness
  • access to mental health services
  • community support systems
  • emotional support
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