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Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view

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Nowadays, Sports are becoming more and more popular
activities
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 all over the world. While extreme sports like sky diving and skiing are dangerous
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 so that the government should take necessary actions in order to ban it.
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 is due to the fact that many
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 who
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 in serious injuries and
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 ended up in deaths. In my opinion, these
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 should
be completely restrict
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 to avoid
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loss.
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, one of the main reasons is severe injuries while participating in the events.
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,
people
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 get excited and thrilled while engaging but due to the lack of precautions and necessary training as it may cause damages to the body.
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, while doing skiing most
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people
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 do not wear
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equipments
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such
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helmets
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, knee braces, arm braces if they
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 they will get severe injuries which even break
a legs
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a leg
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, hands. From my own experience, my brother participated in
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 activity with no full coverage which
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 him to
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loose
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 his leg.
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,
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performing high risky attempts with fear can lead to death.
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 to raise the blood pressure levels and create a panic in
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 which causes heart attacks.
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, the average BP for a normal person is 120/80 but if it crosses 140/100 can create a heavy blood flow with
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 situation heart rate will increase
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 normal to high and stop functioning. To sum up,
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people
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 get excited by doing extreme
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 as it creates fun for them but it is
more risky
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riskier
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. The authorities should strictly impose a ban on harmful
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 in order to save the lives of the
people
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. To me risk involved sports are not at all encouraged.
Submitted by marubolu on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adrenaline rush
  • risk threshold
  • thrill-seeking
  • safety protocols
  • hazard assessment
  • adventure tourism
  • regulatory framework
  • personal autonomy
  • informed consent
  • risk mitigation strategies
  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
  • freedom of choice
  • accident prevalence
  • emergency response
  • courage and resilience
  • endorphin release
  • legal implications
  • peer pressure effects
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