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Some people believe that smartphones are destroying social interaction today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Smartphones
 have become a crucial part of our life.they assist us in doing a variety of different tasks. Some
people
 are of the opinion that mobile phones have reduced the
amount
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 of face-to-face interactions occurring between
people
.In my opinion, they have in fact increased our interactions with others.The following paragraphs will discuss both views and justify my opinion. Without ,
smartphones
 our everyday activities will be hindered.
This
 is because they help us in several ways.In their absence, we will not be able to communicate effectively.
Smartphones
 and
internet
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 allow us to stay in contact with our family and friends without the need of being face-to-face with them.They have made it possible for us to communicate with
people
 from all over the globe, despite
of
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the geographical barriers.
For example
, I always face-time my friends studying abroad by using my phone.
This
 has strengthened our friendship enormously.
On the other hand
, it is an undeniable fact that mobiles have damaged social interaction.The reason for
this
 is, we are always looking at our phone screen and
hence
 forget to talk to
people
 who are in front of us.
Moreover
, today there are many
people
 who prefer to stay at home and spend time on their
smartphones
,
instead
 of attending social events.
for instance
, I always try to avoid going to social gatherings so that I can binge-watch my favourite TV shows. To conclude, even though it may seem that
people
 are growing distant due to excessive usage of
smartphones
, I believe that reality is quite the opposite.It is only because of
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availability of advanced phones , that we are able to interact with our family members and friends living far away from us.I think they have really made the world into one big family.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limit
  • face-to-face communication
  • social media
  • loss of real connections
  • distract
  • engaging
  • empathy
  • personal connection
  • addictive
  • isolation
  • enhance
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