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In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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It is true that consumers prefer to buy products imported from other countries rather than local produce. In
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, the availability of a wide range of imported ingredients enables families to vary their diets and experiment with new recipes. Local goods seem tedious and no longer stimulates the taste buds because people have eaten these kinds of food many times before.
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, the attractive marketing and presentation of imported goods give them an appealing and appetizing appearance. Consumers come to expect high-quality packaging
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 so that meals look tasty, safe, and hygienic.
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, there are many measures that can be implemented to persuade clients to purchase local merchandise. The most important thing is that experts should inform customers of the negative implications of imported goods for human health.
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, because of long-haul transportation, commodities produced in other countries need to use artificial preservatives to keep them fresh. Another solution is that local vendors and companies should improve their images and packaging.
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, they ought to invest in marketing campaigns to promote products through different types of media,
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 as television, social networking sites, radio, and leaflets. In conclusion, while there are many reasons why customers choose to buy imported commodities, some measures should be adopted by local farmers to meet
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • novelty
  • diversity
  • perception
  • premium
  • globalization
  • cuisines
  • economic factors
  • subsidies
  • tariffs
  • competitive
  • farm-to-table
  • eco-conscious
  • consumption
  • sustainability
  • local economy
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