Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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believe that rivalry of feeling in the young can be given be courage,
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to argue that co-operate is necessary so it should be taught to children and
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process will create more chances than a sense of competition. I believe strongly, the rivalry of feeling is not better than the
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of all, take a look at the to co-operate, many
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claim that there are some advantages. One of them, essential situations can be found out by
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easier because if a person overlooks,
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discover it.
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, without the sin had better proved by a lawyer, probably he or she forgets to watch out
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day and age there are some disasters in the world and doctors can reveal cures with
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easier than the
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, your rivals will become fewer than before time and Another you can get support, ideas, comments from your dudes. I am of the opinion that the indispensable condition is to understand each other and to esteem or respect. In fact,
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to struggle permanently. Briefly, the
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can give more chances, relevant, comfort and so on, in , add it is more profitable.
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, as a matter of , a fact some
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always prefer to compete, I believe that there are some reasons ,
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don't admire sharing successes, lucks or they always become alone in life and they have accustomed
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process. What is more, some
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can betray if a person works alone, probably he or she can prevent
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process partly. In my opinion, every selection is to be respected by every person. Weighing up both sides of the argument, there are more positive sides
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than the rivalry of the feeling. What is more, I have read that from various books and blogs
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is crucial for the future.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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