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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It has been suggested that topic for discussion, more
people
 believe that rivalry of feeling in the young can be given be courage,
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 the
others
 to argue that co-operate is necessary so it should be taught to children and
this
 process will create more chances than a sense of competition. I believe strongly, the rivalry of feeling is not better than the
cooperation
First
 of all, take a look at the to co-operate, many
people
 claim that there are some advantages. One of them, essential situations can be found out by
people
 easier because if a person overlooks,
others
 discover it.
For instance
, without the sin had better proved by a lawyer, probably he or she forgets to watch out
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 maybe
others
 can remember(remind). Another pattern, in
this
 day and age there are some disasters in the world and doctors can reveal cures with
cooperation
 easier than the
others
.
In addition
, your rivals will become fewer than before time and Another you can get support, ideas, comments from your dudes. I am of the opinion that the indispensable condition is to understand each other and to esteem or respect. In fact,
people
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 to struggle permanently. Briefly, the
cooperation
 can give more chances, relevant, comfort and so on, in , add it is more profitable.
On the other hand
, as a matter of , a fact some
people
 always prefer to compete, I believe that there are some reasons ,
for instance
,
people
 don't admire sharing successes, lucks or they always become alone in life and they have accustomed
this
 process. What is more, some
people
 can betray if a person works alone, probably he or she can prevent
this
 process partly. In my opinion, every selection is to be respected by every person. Weighing up both sides of the argument, there are more positive sides
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cooperation
 than the rivalry of the feeling. What is more, I have read that from various books and blogs
cooperation
 is crucial for the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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