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Technological developments leads to lots of environmental issues. Some people think a simple life style can preserve the environment. While others argue technology itself can solve it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#developments #lots #people #life #style #environment #technology
It is often argued that
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advancement in technologies , directly or indirectly creates
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for
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environment
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the environment
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.A group of people suggest that transformation in
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standard
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 can mitigate
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believes that
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 technology can help to fix
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 issues.
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this
 essay will discuss both perspectives. On the one hand,those who think that
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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 of human
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play
imperative
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 role in environmental protection.Each
individuals
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 has
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 to less use of technological appliances in homes or in offices and tries to do work physically
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be prevent
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 the ambience from
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,
by
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changes
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 habits in
lifestyle
 may make
environment
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 evergreen .
Besides
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, nowadays,people using owned private vehicles to commute
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 workplace , which creates carbon emissions in
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 ,in order to get rid
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this
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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 can be effective measures,which would
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 to finish the nearby work
such
 as shopping and going to colleges .
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 , Bicycle will definitely
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 the situation in
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 way.
On the other hand
,the opponent of
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view point
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 believes that environmental friendly advancement in technology can bring significant changes
such
 as renewable energy sources (solar system) which provides 24*7 hours electricity
unconditionly
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unconditionally
.
Hence
,environmental
polluton
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pollution
 can be reduced to some extent.
Secondly
, the government should make strict legislation against
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the usage of plastic bags and persuade the citizens to use
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jute bags which is
eco- friendly
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 in nature and would help to make
environment
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the environment
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 fresh. To conclude,
lifestyle
 and advancement in machines can protect the
environment
 safer.It makes
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 of both individuals and regimes to take initiative towards
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environmental protection.By changing simple
lifestyle
 habits and
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eco-friendly
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eco- friendly
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 electronic gadgets can reduce the negative impacts on ambience.
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  • technological advancements
  • environmental damage
  • sustainable living practices
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy sources
  • electric vehicles
  • recycling and waste management
  • energy efficiency
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • immediate environmental benefits
  • long-term sustainability
  • integrating both approaches
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