Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

There are split views about
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of people before or after
school
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impact on his
life
. Some people believe that whatever a
child
learn before starting
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school
is important in his
future
success or failures, whereas another group of thinkers support that
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person
life
is impacted by his learning during
school
time
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own pros and cons.
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view
, both
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opinions must be discussed. Examining the former
view
that
person
at his
child
age
has
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something
benificial
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beneficial
for his
life
. The prime reason that I
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believe in
this
statement as
in
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that
age
a baby boy doesn't have that much grasping ability to learn and apply that in his
future
.
This
is because
,
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at that
age
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he just want to have fun with whatever he is doing and does not think for
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at that
time
as
he
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not aware of it.
For example
, If a
person
teaches a
child
how to invest money at
his
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early
age
he
don't
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even remember for 2 days just because that
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doesn't make sense for him. On the
contraray
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contrary
, the latter
view
suggest
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that in
growth
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the growth
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of a
person
depands
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depends
on
school
life
. To add
this
student learn some
benificial
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beneficial
things at
school
time
and in that
age
they
also
expericing
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experiencing
life
, which makes more sense
that
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whatever they are learning they take in
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fruitful
fruitfull
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manner for their
future
,
as
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that
time
they are mature enough compare to
child
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the child
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age
.
For example
, parents told his
child
to save money so
he
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would
listen
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it and try to save it as that
time
in
school
teacher taught
him
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them
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the importance of money.
Finally
, in my opinion, I firmly support the
view
of
school
time
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is best to mould their
future
. The main justification is at that
time
perosn
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person
more mature and has more ability to understand
the
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things and
its
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impact on
life
. To
conclulde
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conclude
, there are
may
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supporters of
child
age
education before
school
but my arguments prove that
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best way to teach students about improvements
is
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the
school
time
.
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  • influence
  • future life
  • experiences
  • childhood development
  • bonding
  • socialization
  • peer interactions
  • basic skills
  • education
  • learning
  • friendships
  • independence
  • identity
  • exposure
  • new ideas
  • perspectives
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