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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays the number of
people
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 willing to purchase brand name products are increasing. These
items
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 improve their self-esteem and
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 their social status.
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, the quality of the
items
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 sometimes are overrated and they are too costly. The action of purchasing famous goods can be both positive and negative. I will explain my points of view in the following paragraphs.
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 of all, owing the famous
items
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 can improve one’s self-confidence. Those well-known brands
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 as Gucci, Louis Vuitton and BMW always provide an image of success.
People
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 who use these products are easily recognised by their friends and colleagues.
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, it is common for famous celebrities to drive brand cars.
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, If
people
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 bought a famous car, it is proved that their social status has changed significantly which contributes to positive development.
On the other hand
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, there is no correlation between brand
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 and quality. It is promoted by repeating advertisements but not its nature.
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, some products are said to have many functions yet lack scientific evidence. Obviously,
people
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 will easily be trapped by the media.
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, those
items
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 are often too costly.
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,
people
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 who are addicted to expensive accessories will eventually become poor as they continue to buy them. It is clear that it is a negative development. In conclusion, buying famous brands have both good things and drawbacks. In my opinion,
people
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 surely benefit from self-esteem from famous
items
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. As long as they are capable of self-control, it is not a negative development.
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