In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Every county has its own ability to advance in technology because the government invest
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goods and services heavily by supporting big
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. These
products
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are vital for our survival in the 21st century. But
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it's harming our society and our standard of living. I accept that multinational organisations and their
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are
extermely
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extremely
important to ease the way we operate our day-to-day
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activities
. The main reason for my disagreement is that the
products
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which are developed by these influential
companies
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, helping our economy in a great way.
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as cars, mobile phones are key things in our lives.
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, we cannot live without them and the household income is
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on the rise.
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people are buying more
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and the industries are improving and being innovative.
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, it is understandable that these
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will continue to strive whether we agree
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them or not.
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, when we think about the health factor,
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quite alarming. Due to the increase of mining for raw earth
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there are many complex items are being manufactured.
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, to implement a
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smartphone
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smart phone
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with water & dust
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, they need to use special
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of chemicals which are called forever chemicals. These are
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extremely
harmful
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humans and
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not to mention, the plastic consumption is on the rise as well. All these materials are impacting our life.
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, People are getting cancer and various long-term illness due to the production of fossil fuels.
Goverments
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Governments
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all over the world
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to take
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climate change very
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seriously
and find out alternative ways to bring down
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problem to a minimum level. Overall, These big giant
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thrives
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to deliver the best
products
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for the people and the risk of damaging our health is on the high but I strongly believe there will be a way to tame
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outcome and improve our livelihood.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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