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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
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In
this
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 modern era, we might know obviously that
internet
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have
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 a big impact
in
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 shaping our culture and behaviour. Actually, reading habit is not an exception; while everything could be browsed and read
by
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online and free, some
peoples
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 think that nobody would buy physical books or
newspapers
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 anymore in the future. I partially disagree with
this
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 notion that it would totally change all
peoples
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’ behaviour. Today, many
peoples
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 have changed their reading preferences from physical to digital
one
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. They argue that the latter might give them more simplicity:
accessible
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, portable, and affordable.
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, they might interact with
another user
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other users
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 as they could participate in comments. With a variety of media – as they could watch videos, listen to podcasts, and see colourful pictures – they might feel
contented
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 with the online
newspapers
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.
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, some
peoples
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 believe that online
newspapers
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 could not replace the printed
newspapers
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 at all. They might argue that the printed one has more accurate information than the other. They might
also
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 say that
,
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 “money could buy trustworthy and reliable data”. As we might know, we could see numerous
clickbaits
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click baits
 occurred in online activities these days; the headline usually does not match with the content. It might be annoying for some
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peoples
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people
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.
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, some
peoples
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 believe that the comfortability of reading physical
newspapers
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 could not be compared with the digital one. It has to be more delightful reading in physical
newspapers
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. To conclude, in spite of the changing behaviour caused by the
growing
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 of
internet
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the internet
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, we might not eliminate the existence of physical
newspapers
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 and books, even if the sophisticated world might be developed in our future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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