Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

With the increasing of commuting
time
in recent years, there are residents suggesting to occupy public entertaining
areas
including
parks
and gardens with residential buildings, while others and I disagree with
this
statement. In
this
essay, I will discuss both opinions and my idea with examples. On the one hand, it is true that the commuters spend an extremely long
time
on the way to work every day, so shortening the travelling
time
is necessary. In that case, the idea of occupying public
areas
is understandable.
This
is because most of the botanical gardens and People’s
parks
are usually located in central suburbs as well as most of the commercial offices in high-rise buildings.
For example
, in Melbourne, the Botanical Garden covers an area of ten thousand square meters right
next
to the Commercial Business District. People of Melbourne may spend less than ten minutes to their offices if they moved to the Botanical Garden.
On the other hand
, even though it seems effective to replace public
areas
with residential buildings, I do not agree with the suggestion because of the two reasons below.
First
and foremost, public
areas
are symbols of high quality of life because people’s lives are not only full of work and careers.
Instead
, the importance of life-work balance has been valued more in the
last
decades. If the governments destroy the
parks
and gardens, residents will have no place to take a walk and exercise in their spare
time
, which will definitely lower the quality of living.
Furthermore
, greens in
parks
are the lungs of the city. As reports have shown that air pollution has seriously influenced the health of human beings in urban
areas
since twenty century, including lung cancer and strep throat.
Therefore
, with a reasonable amount of plants, the problem of carbon dioxide and other air polluted contaminants can be alleviated in urban
areas
. In conclusion, even though lessening the commuting pressure is necessary, in my opinion, it is not the best idea to construct apartments on our limited green land in central suburbs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuters
  • urban areas
  • housing availability
  • alleviating housing crises
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental health
  • biodiversity
  • recreational
  • mental health benefits
  • urban heat islands
  • green lungs
  • community interaction
  • cohesion
  • innovative urban planning
  • multi-use buildings
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