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More and more qualified people are moving from poor countries to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine . some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people , rich countries are stealing from poor countries.others feel that this is the only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. discuss the both points of views.

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Nowadays, well-qualified
people
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 are moving to developed
countries
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 and
work
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 in specialist areas
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 engineering, computing and medicine. Some experts think that rich
countries
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 are stealing from the developing
countries
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 by encouraging the movement,
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however
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 others believe
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 is the only
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way for workers to earn what they deserve. In
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 of all,
countries
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 will grow only if they have educated
people
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, a good health care system, stable economic structure . ,
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 they need scientists, engineers, doctors etc. because they are the pillar of any nation growth and if they all go to the affluent
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 so poor nations never become wealthy
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, if developing
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 lose their human resources it will wreak havoc to the nation.
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, It will be devastating if these
people
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 should not stay in their country and not
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 for their own country.
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, workers have the freedom to
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 around the world.
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, developing
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 never give them what they deserve for their hard
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 and they don't have enough resources to use their skills and they have freedom where they want to leave their life. In
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 ,world everyone wants better life so you get somewhere else it is worth it. In conclusion, It is important for to
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 think about yourselves. They should well pay for their hard
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 they should think about country
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 if their developed they don't need to go anywhere and get what they want in their own nation.
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