“Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.” To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In traditional societies, the mother always had the responsibility to take care of the
children
whilst the father was financially providing.
However
, in modern times, I believe
parents
are equally important responsibility for
children
.
Firstly
, nowadays, due to the pressure and competition in finding a job, it is very difficult to find a job that can provide for the whole family.
Besides
, women are now well educated and have the same ability to find good jobs as men.
Therefore
, to meet
children
's basic needs
such
as food, clothing, and education, both
parents
need to contribute. The financial sharing from the mother will reduce the financial burden on the father and make the family atmosphere less stressful, making everyone in the family happy, including the
children
. In order to reduce the burden of women in housework, men should
also
share the daily chores in the family.
Secondly
, to become a good physical and character person,
children
need
parents
to guide them to the right way to achieve
this
.
For example
, the father should spend time playing with
children
, taking them to sports games
such
as football, baseball. These can make the child active, confident and fatherhood is more bonding.
On the other hand
, the mother can teach them etiquette as well as good behaviours. In conclusion, an ideology exists that because women take full responsibility for decisions about childbearing, she
also
is responsible for rearing the child, I believe that
this
idea is absolutely faulty. Because with sharing child-rearing,
parents
can make a happy, safe home environment for their kids.
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