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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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For some people, the culture of the individuals has been influenced by the
country
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 where they lived, but others claim that
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influence
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 is much short. The culture of the population can be defined through the types of food, clothes, level of education and sometimes the
country
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 can not only maximize but
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 minimize the importance of these items.
This
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 essay will discuss how a
country
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 can determine the culture of
someone
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. On the one hand, if it is a fair and democratic
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 with many opportunities not only the education but
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 the job for the citizens and the quality health for the population, there are not questions that people will have proud of living there.
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, a
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 that invests in its population will have a society more active and determined to show and share with the world its origin and perception.
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, the more people are stimulated and encouraged by a specific place, the more they will have proud of their origins.
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, a
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 can
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 in some cases. But
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, the baggage of knowledge of
someone
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 can be determined by a variety of factors,
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 as different kinds of music and the use of the internet which leads to change attitudes and behaviour of
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.
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, a Japanese baby who was born in Japan, but since child lives in The Unit States with his family, if the family do not maintain the tradition of Japan inside of the house, certainly
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 child will grow up with the American and occidental traditions because the ambience around his has much more
influence
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 than original
country
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. In my opinion, other aspects are much more responsible for the experience of
someone
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 than the origin
country
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. In conclusion, there are many items responsible for moulding the perception of
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 and sometimes the original place can have less or more
influence
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 depend on how these items are motivated.
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 essay argued how a
country
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 can determine the experience of
someone
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