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It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

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Wildlife
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 does play
very
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a very
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 important life
for
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the
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human well being.
Wildlife
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 does not even include
animals
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 only it does have
trees
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,
birds
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 and some humans
as well as
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, as well as forest,
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forest
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the forest
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 is
also
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 a
habitent
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habitat
 for some people. The
Governments
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Government
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 does need to spend
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sufficient
sufficent
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a sufficent
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 amount of money to protect the
wildlife
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 which will
further
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 help to
proctect
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protect
 human race.
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 of all, I would like to
elborate
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elaborate
 the benefits of spending more resources to protect the
forest
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 life. Animal life requires more protection for survival to prevent the destruction of the species of
animals
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. I have seen multiple
type
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types
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 of
the
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birds
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 and
animal
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animals
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 are eloping due to lack of protection of
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the favorable
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favorable
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favourable
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 environment in
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forest
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the forest
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.
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, The government has to spend more wealth on preventing fires
among
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in
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 the
forest
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 to protect
animals
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,
birds
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 and
trees
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.
Trees
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 play
an
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a
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 very important role to maintain
healthy
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a healthy
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 environment for the
peolpe
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people
. There will be
lack
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a lack
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 of oxygen for the survival of each and every living creature in
this
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 world.
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Furthermore
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Further more
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Furthermore
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,
Wildlife
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 is
a
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an
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 habitant of specific
kind
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kinds
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 of certain species which are rare to find.
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,
Forest
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 is
also
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 a
livlihood
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livelihood
 for some human
being
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beings
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such
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 as hunters. National parks are
aslo
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also
great
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a great
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 source of money for the government as
peolpe
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people
 loves to explore the national parks. In the nutshell, I would like to conclude that Government does need to use funds to protect the national parks,
animals
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,
birds
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 and
trees
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 for the
existance
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existence
 of humans
on
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in
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this
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 world.
Wildlife
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 tremendously requires more attention and care along with other problems of the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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