It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

Wildlife
does play
very
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important life
for
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the
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human well being.
Wildlife
does not even include
animals
only it does have
trees
,
birds
and some humans
as well as
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, as well as forest,
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forest
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the forest
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is
also
a
habitent
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habitat
for some people. The
Governments
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does need to spend
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sufficient
sufficent
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a sufficent
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amount of money to protect the
wildlife
which will
further
help to
proctect
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protect
human race.
First
of all, I would like to
elborate
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elaborate
the benefits of spending more resources to protect the
forest
life. Animal life requires more protection for survival to prevent the destruction of the species of
animals
. I have seen multiple
type
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of
the
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birds
and
animal
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animals
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are eloping due to lack of protection of
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the favorable
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favorable
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environment in
forest
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the forest
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.
Secondly
, The government has to spend more wealth on preventing fires
among
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the
forest
to protect
animals
,
birds
and
trees
.
Trees
play
an
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very important role to maintain
healthy
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environment for the
peolpe
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people
. There will be
lack
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of oxygen for the survival of each and every living creature in
this
world.
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Further more
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,
Wildlife
is
a
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habitant of specific
kind
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kinds
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of certain species which are rare to find.
Moreover
,
Forest
is
also
a
livlihood
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livelihood
for some human
being
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beings
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such
as hunters. National parks are
aslo
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also
great
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source of money for the government as
peolpe
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people
loves to explore the national parks. In the nutshell, I would like to conclude that Government does need to use funds to protect the national parks,
animals
,
birds
and
trees
for the
existance
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existence
of humans
on
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this
world.
Wildlife
tremendously requires more attention and care along with other problems of the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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