In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

Owning a home is a
dream
for a number of
people
and
a
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some
people
work hard to achieve it. In some regions, buying a
house
is considered to be important for some
people
rather than staying in a rented
house
. In my opinion, it is a negative development and in
this
essay, I will be mentioning why
people
feel it is important to own a
house
and what are the negative implications of
this
.
To begin
with, man is a social animal and some
people
do a number of things to maintain
a
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social status.
This
is
one
of the reasons why
people
in some countries want to have a
house
of their own and are not
williing
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willing
to rent a
house
.
For instance
, I have noticed that in India neighbours judge another
persons
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person's
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social status by looking at their
house
and car and if someone stays in a rented
appartment
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apartment
, they think that the person does not have enough
money
to own a
house
.
Moreover
,
people
buy a
house
just to show others that they have wealth and
this
is
one
of the major
reason
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why it is of utmost importance for some
people
to invest in buying a
house
. It is important to save
money
and some
people
spend all their
money
on buying a home and do not save for the rainy days.
This
is to say that, mankind spends
money
on buying luxurious homes just to show the power of wealth and end up spending all their savings in order to do so.
Furthermore
, they opt for property loans to pay for their
dream
house
and end up paying a hefty amount in interest. It is a vicious circle and
get
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stuck deeper under the
budern
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burden
of heavy loans.
For instance
,
one
of my friends applied for a mortgage to buy a new
house
and he bought the
house
of his dreams but after a few months he was not able to pay the steep EMIs and
as a
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his
house
was put up for auction by
tha
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the
bank.
This
is why it is a negative situation and renting a
house
is not a bad option
afterall
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after all
. To conclude, buying a
house
is a
dream
and
one
should look to
fulfill
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the
dream
by being able to pay for the
house
on their own rather than opting for humongous loans which they might struggle to pay in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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