Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

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It is often argued that high-wage salaries are way more important than
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satisfaction
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. I partially agree with the said notion.
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higher salaries are considered an essential element for improving the quality of living,
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satisfaction
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should not be underestimated.
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, a number of arguments surround my opinion. There are several reasons to support my opinion. The primary reason why
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satisfaction
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is very important as it involves most of a human's life span. To put it another way, a place where you work always becomes your second home as you finish up with your studies and eventually get a
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, choosing a
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that you are interested in and you truly love to do is necessary for better living
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of getting a
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which seems boring to you but has big salaries.
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, if a
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wants to pursue a photography
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, but because of pressure from their parents, they might choose a
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that will help to make a good amount of
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like being a doctor or an engineer, which is completely against their interest, which will eventually make a
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's life hell as they will be spending most of their day working on something which they don't even like.
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, opponents sometimes support it for many reasons. In today's world, where inflation is at its peak, a
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needs to make enough
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for their living and
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provide well for their family members, for
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high paying jobs becomes very important.
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, when a
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starts a family where he has his wife and
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his children, responsibilities increase
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expenses.
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, You want to buy a good house for your family, and plan vacations,
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you want your children to get the best education, which always requires
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. So I feel getting a
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that is
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paying well is extremely important.
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,
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satisfaction
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is an important element for a
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's well-being, but pursuing a
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according to
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the
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market should
also
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be considered. In my opinion, both things should be balanced up well. A
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should take
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only in careers in which they can make enough
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and
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fulfill
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all their needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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