More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol and as a result, breaking the law. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

The number of young
people
who violate laws by using
drugs
and
alcohol
has increased recently.
This
is because technology allows young adults to access them more frequently and the changes in a social relationship made them harder to consult their mental health. I believe enforcing stricter regulations can be a solution to deal with
this
problem. The major reason why increasing youngsters commit crimes of using
drugs
and
alcohol
illegally is that the prevalence of the internet facilitates them to gain
drugs
and
alcohol
. On the internet, adolescents are able to purchase them easily by disguising someone,
such
as their parents.
Furthermore
, with the change in social relationships, the young generation has fewer
people
to consult their stress. Currently, for young
people
, there are a considerable number of factors pressuring them including their school life, the relationship with parents and future career.
However
, as social bonds have weakened, they do not have so many
people
to have a conversation with.
Thus
,
drugs
and
alcohol
are methods to forget their daily distress. To tackle
this
problem, I argue that the government should tighten the regulations of sellers. By imposing more stringent punishments, stores become more responsible for selling their products.
This
is well exemplified by my part-time experience at a convenience store. In Japan, young
people
are not required to show their identification cards every time unless the convenience store clerks ask them to do so. Most clerks are afraid of complaints by the customers more and tend to avoid asking them. As
this
illustrates, the measures to the irresponsibility of sellers
also
contribute to dealing with
this
problem. In conclusion, the young public use
drugs
and
alcohol
increasingly because the accessibility of these commodities have been facilitated and the burdens surrounding young
people
made them use illegal products. In my opinion, more legislation for sellers is required to change their awareness.
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