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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requriement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste.

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Humans are inevitably resistant to changes in their ways of life. Some
people
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 acknowledge that the required amount of waste is not being recycled and
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, it is essential for
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government
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the government
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 to take the charge of
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 and to devise
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law for exercising recycling.
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, in my opinion,
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government
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the government
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 must take action in order to encourage
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recycling since
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people
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 do not process it on their own to a needed level.
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, a large chunk of recyclable materials is extracted from
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households, making them a huge contributor.To illustrate, Japanese homes recycle 90% of their aluminium materials,which was 55%, after the introduction of tax redeeming law on recyclable products. It is because of the increased pollution in
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 and productive pressure on industries, it is imperative for governments to take the issue
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 their hands. Since, we have seen in the past that
people
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 tend not to take many viable opinions seriously unless
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 those opinions are forged into laws.
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, not only
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the Government
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 but
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 private sectors can
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 come into
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for
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 helping governments to segregate
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recyclable products.
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, one of the vending
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machines
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 in Germany provides
discount
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a discount
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 of 2%, if customers recycle their previous used canned
bottle
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 into the vending machine. In my view,
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government
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 all by itself cannot achieve the result without the help of the private sector.
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, it is a paramount job for
people
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 to reduced carbon footprints,
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however
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people
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 cannot achieve
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 target on their own without the intervention of governments. To conclude, it is lucrative for
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government
govenment
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 to intervene in
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 situation, where it can have
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 leverage of collecting taxes when a certain quantity of recyclable material is not achieved and simultaneously
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 will help humanity in reducing pollutants into
enivironment
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environment
 and will encourage the judicial use of our resources.

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