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Many people believe that that high level of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced

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There has been a tremendous amount of violence in the
movues
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movies
 produced these days. many
people
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 believe it has a
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long
 lasting impact on
people
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 of all
age-groups
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age groups
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 which leads to
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numerous social issues.
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of how
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 individual put their
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 in danger
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 of
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 movies along with some solutions to mitigate these issues.
Firtsly
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, young
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 endangered their
life
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 when they imitate the stunts
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performed
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feature films. For
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instance
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 these dangerous acts are done under the proper supervision in cinema, adults tend to do these without guidance leading their
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, performing these acts are regarded as strength and confidence
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 youngsters try these at their homes imposing various threats to them.
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, putting general
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 lives at risk is one of the big
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casued
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caused
 by the dangerous stunts in the reel.
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, media has become a great source of learning ways of
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committing
 crimes by boosting the confidence of criminals.
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, most of
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the
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give
idead
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idea
ideas
 to the criminals how they can easily murder and escape from the consequences.
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, these shows
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 a sense of fear and insecurity in society with the increasing rates of crimes in general Many steps can be taken to ameliorate the above problems
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 as these dangerous acts should be banned fully.
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there should be age restrictions on
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the audience
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 which specifically excludes
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the
 viewers for
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the age
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 group
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below 18 from watching
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, negative reinforcement should be given to villians which serves an important lesson. To conclude, problems of creating various threats in real
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 and increased rate of crime due to films could be avoided
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by
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 taking steps of banning these and restricting specific age-group.
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