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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that the achievement in the career and education must use a lot of
information
such
 as scientific research,
business
 and academic world which some people think that it should be shared freely to others, while others think that some
information
 is too vital or too valuable to be shared freely because there have copyrighted of the author. From my point of view,
although
 sharing of
information
 has had benefits, there offer some drawbacks. On the one hand, one of
advantages
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 of
information
 sharing is that it is
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important going forward in science,
business
 and education.
For example
, many scientists are often sharing their newest discoveries with other researchers around the world because they want to achieve
acceptability
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 from others.
Additionally
, many teachers must share their
ideas
 and knowledge
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 their students due to the student cannot correctly graduate without
ideas
, planes and
information
.
In other words
, if teachers do not share their
ideas
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 students, the education of learners will fail to succeed.
Furthermore
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information
 publishing is
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vital in
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business
 term, for the
business
 cannot grow without publishing between businessmen around
business
 society.
On the other hand
, many persons do not like
this
 idea which is publishing freely
information
 due to they think that it has negative effects
to
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 everyone in
community
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.
For instance
, one of
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 is that it has
risk
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a risk
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 of losing an important
information
business
 which can lead to
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 problem in the future of the company and organization.
Secondly
, it may be at risk for
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illegal
information
 sharing because many
ideas
,
information
 and knowledge from researchers and businessmen are copyrighting which is helping them to protect
ideas
, planes and inventions from
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free
information
 sharing. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
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free
information
 publishing has had
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significance to everyone
such
 as students, businessmen and scientists, but it is
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 risk in some
business
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.
Therefore
, it is recommended that everybody should be aware of the proper of
information
 publishing to
public
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the public
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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