With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

It is true that the supply of fossil fuels should follow its demand which is

raising

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day by day, but

instead

of focusing on

this

particular

fuel

, it is possible to meet the needs of customers in using other

energy

resources. In

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essay, I will explain my disagreement with the topic sentence. Nobody can deny the fact that

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the population

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is growing and the economy have the responsibility to support it. Public needs ranging from transportation to heating the houses are concerned with using

oil

and

gas

which has some negative consequences in our lives and on our planet. The resources of

this

fuel

are limited

therefore

it makes it difficult to discover the potential areas.

In

addition

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the authorities spend

the

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a

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great proportion of the taxes on finding

oil

.

On the other

hand

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a great part of global pollution can be addressed

to

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by

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burning fossil

fuel

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fuels

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.

As a result

, by

a

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constructing valuable infrastructure for finding

Gas

and

Oil

, we helped the planet to be more damaged. We can find our new path by using

the

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renewable

energy

instead

of insisting and the traditional way. there are

variety

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a variety

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of renewable

energy

resources on earth

such

as solar, wind, Hydroelectric and wave which can be good options to use rather than fossil

fuel

.

first

of all, they are all environmentally friendly alternatives

which

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can be applied

in

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both minor and larger scales. Our other alternative is to use more efficient machines which can be compatible with every kind of

energy

.By planting solar panels or wind turbines, we will probably become independent of using

gas

and

oil

. In conclusion, I completely disagree with

the

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destroying the Earth by searching for more

oil

and

gas

spots, while we can benefit from consuming

other kind

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another kind

other kinds

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of

energy

such

as wind and solar power.