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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #jobs #employees
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Developed and rich
countries
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 should permit
employees
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 from poor
countries
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 for skilled jobs. I completely agree with
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 opinion as there are many benefits associated with
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 being that
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 a move helps in the economic growth of both, poor and rich
countries
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 and
secondly
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, it leads to a better standard of living for those in poor
countries
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To begin
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 with, if developed
nations
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 allow
employees
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 from less developed
nations
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 to work, it will benefit the economy of rich
nations
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. Companies in rich
countries
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 can use the skills and knowledge of
employees
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 from poor
countries
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 to grow their businesses, which corresponds to the growth of the economy in their country.
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, there are some rich
nations
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 that are not fully developed due to less density of population, the foreign nationals can help in utilizing resources of these
nations
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 at the fullest.
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, underpopulated
nations
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 like Canada and Australia have benefited from the immigrants coming for work in their
countries
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.
Secondly
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,
this
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 move will improve the standard of living of those skilled
employees
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Moreover
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, it will
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 better the lives of their families living in poor
nations
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. These immigrants
employees
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 earn good pay, which they spend on their requirements here and transfer the savings to their families living in their home country, thereby improving their standard of living and in turn benefiting those poor
nations
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. To conclude, considering the various benefits to the economies of both the
countries
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 and the quality of life enjoyed by these immigrant
employees
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, I believe that
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 a move should be implemented by rich
countries
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