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Write about the following topic: Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is often thought that
computer
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 is the most relevant
invetion
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invention
 of the
last
 century. I strongly agree with
this
 sentence and I am going to explain the reason why.
Firstly
, I think that nowadays with
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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 we can do everything we want
for instance
 we can read a book, watch a film or
listent
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listen
listens
 to music.
Moreover
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 we can work by
computer
 meanwhile you are sitting on your sofa in your
confortable
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comfortable
 home.
This
 number of smart-working
people
 is
steadly
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steadily
 increased during the
last
 year as
consequence
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 of Covid-19.
In
addition
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 I think that the
computer
 played a
foundamental
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fundamental
 role during the lock-down period , in
fact
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 a lot of students, including myself, have attended all the lessons online and that was unbelievable without an electronic
insturument
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instrument
.
Although
 the
computer
 has helped a lot of
people
, someone got damage by it and
this
 happened because there are a lot of dangerous things under
computer
,
expecially
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especially
 using
Internet
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. As a consequence
computer
 can be extremely
usefull
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useful
 for some
people
, but for
others
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 It can lead to negative experiences as damage of privacy. In
conclusion
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 I completely agree with
people
 who
says
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 that
computer
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the computer
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 was the most important
invetion
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invention
 in the
last
 hundred years but I
also
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that is
 important to make aware all the
people
 about the dangers you can find while you are using an electronic device.
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