Some people prefer to do physical activities to relax, while others choose mental activities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is certainly true that individuals do lots of things to calm down their
mindp
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mind
minds
. To achieve metal
piece
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pieces
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some
people
join gymnasium and sports clubs and others play indoor
games
. Due to
this
, all the factors will be elaborated
in
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the upcoming paragraphs along with
the
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my opinion.
To begin
with, unfurling some valuable reasons of
this
topic.
First
and foremost, it is commonly seen that
to play
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playing
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physical
games
like football, hockey, cricket
are
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not only
benifital
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beneficial
for human health but
also
good for
brain
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the brain
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system. To explain, when
people
indulge in physical
games
their whole body parts work together and at the same time body realise feel good harmons which swing mood into negative to
postivie
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positive
and
people
feel light at that period.
Secondly
,
people
feel the connection between their body and mind when they do any exercise and forget all their
another problems
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another problem
other problems
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.
For example
, in
gymnasium
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the gymnasium
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people
do several
kind
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kinds
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of practices and build their muscles strong and spend time in
positive
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the positive
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era.
On the other hand
, there are different types of
another activities
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another activity
other activities
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which play
in
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home
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the home
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and
also
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are also
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helpful
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to relax
mind
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the mind
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. Primarily, it
is generally
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generally seems
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seem
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seen
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in houses that
people
play
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board
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bord
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board
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games
such
as ludo, carmabord, cards and many more. To play
these kind
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this kind
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of
games
people
fun
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have fun
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together and
it
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is
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also
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is also
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a well technic to pass their free time.
Moreover
, to
advancement
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the advancement
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of
technology
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there are lots of
people
who love to enjoy virtual
games
and relief their frustration.
For instance
, in recent years the demand
of
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for
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fighting
games
are interested because
people
love these
kind
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kinds
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of gaming and feel
stress free
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stress-free
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after play these
type
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types
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of
games
. In conclusion, both
type
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types
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of activities are valuable for humans to reduce
nagativeness
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negativeness
but
i
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I
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believe that involve in physical activities are more important as compare to participate in indoor
games
.
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