Some people think that too much attention and too many resources have been given to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many human being’s activities, including drilling oil, lumbering and so forth, have been exerting a subtle(adverse) impact on natural balance, endangering many species on the earth except humans. But some people recently think that they have paid attention enough to prevent other species from potential crises. I think that overall, I do not agree with the view. Undoubtedly, humans have become more active in animal
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in recent years. Many governments in different counties, especially developing and developed counties, have enforced laws related to animal conservation. More importantly, some regulations forced relevant administrative departments to convert funds from other projects
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as space research and education reform to animal
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programmes. It is understandable that some people insisted that many issues related to wild animals’ safety have been mitigated to some degree; after all, with enough money and the
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of relevant policies, wild
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habitats might get more safe and reliable
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, human beings should not satisfy the contributions they have made because some activities indispensable to their living can still lead to severe problems threatening the safety of wild animals.
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, since most humans’ industries depend on traditional fossil energy, governments have begun the exploitation of untouched natural areas in which many wild creatures have long lived in order to acquire enough energy, which will damage and even destroy a huge number of habitats of wild animals The benefits of invest in animal
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will be more than we have got. Our innovative ideas can be greatly inspired by animals’ behaviours. By that I mean, some great contrivances(发明) should owe to the observation of animal behaviours.
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, inventors have created flippers to facilitate swimming by observing the attribute of frogs’ fins.
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, the invention of aeroplanes helps human beings realize the dream of flying high in the sky, which could
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be attributed to duplicating the birds.
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, to protect various animals is to preserve the sources of creativity for future generations. To summarize, the importance of keeping biodiversity should not be neglected by us even though we have already made contributions in recent years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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