Everyone should be vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Vegetarians have satisfactory immunity despite them not feeding on flesh.
Therefore
, it is not compulsory to feed on flesh to have a balanced diet. To commence with, vegetarian feeds on all food components apart from the animal protein
although
there
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options of feeding on plant protein and
thus
achieve the same nutritional value obtained from
meat
. Vegetables are affordable and easily available.
In
addition
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one kilogram of beans which is plant protein can be consumed by
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a large
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number of
people
unlike I kilogram of
meat
.
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by Kenyatta Nation Hospital nutritional department indicates that only 5% of vegetarian
people
acquire communicable diseases.
Therefore
, for a healthy society and free from communicable diseases being a vegetarian would be a better option.
Secondly
,
Meat
is tasty, attractive and make
people
feel full
unlike
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vegetarian meals which are digested very fast making someone desire to feed frequently.
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almost 95% of
food
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available in entertainment
joint
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is
meat
product and
thus
vegetarians are not well represented.
Therefore
,
meat
has other merits when accompanied by other meals apart from just having a balanced diet. To summarise, a healthy diet will lead to a healthy nation but how
people
feeds
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contribute a lot
on
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the health of a human being. In a
nutshell
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being healthy cannot be negotiated
a
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it
facilitate
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immunity in our body.
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