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Everyone should be vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
Vegetarians have satisfactory immunity despite them not feeding on flesh.
Therefore
, it is not compulsory to feed on flesh to have a balanced diet. To commence with, vegetarian feeds on all food components apart from the animal protein
although
 there
other
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 options of feeding on plant protein and
thus
 achieve the same nutritional value obtained from
meat
. Vegetables are affordable and easily available.
In
addition
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 one kilogram of beans which is plant protein can be consumed by
large
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a large
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 number of
people
 unlike I kilogram of
meat
.
For
example
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done
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 by Kenyatta Nation Hospital nutritional department indicates that only 5% of vegetarian
people
 acquire communicable diseases.
Therefore
, for a healthy society and free from communicable diseases being a vegetarian would be a better option.
Secondly
,
Meat
 is tasty, attractive and make
people
 feel full
unlike
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 vegetarian meals which are digested very fast making someone desire to feed frequently.
For
example
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 almost 95% of
food
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the food
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 available in entertainment
joint
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 is
meat
 product and
thus
 vegetarians are not well represented.
Therefore
,
meat
 has other merits when accompanied by other meals apart from just having a balanced diet. To summarise, a healthy diet will lead to a healthy nation but how
people
feeds
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 contribute a lot
on
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 the health of a human being. In a
nutshell
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 being healthy cannot be negotiated
a
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apply
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it
facilitate
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 immunity in our body.
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