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Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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 of individuals are staying away from their locality as they are commuting towards the developed
areas
 in a state for either educational or job purposes.
This
 situation is an outcome of the lack of learning facilities and occupational opportunities in the villages.The aim of
this
 essay is to elaborate on the reasons behind
this
 scenario and to compare the pros and cons of
this
 scene. There are a few reasons that have paved the way to the given scenario.
Firstly
, even in
this
 22nd century most of the rural
areas
 are lying remote and are not
sphisticated
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sophisticated
 with high-standard schools.
That is
 why
people
 have to stay
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far way
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faraway
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 towns to get the needed
eduaction
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education
.
Secondly
, after the education, there are only a few career options in the villages.
Hence
, to explore a bunch of jobs , the public
have
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 to move to
the
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nearby
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near by
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well developed
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 towns.
For instance
, after a bachelor degree
of
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 engineering , the graduates have to settle in the cities to get a job
which
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 is
in
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 par with their education.
Thus
people
 have to leave their hometowns and come to live in metropolises. The major advantage of
this
 phenomenon is that
people
 can enjoy a whole lot of modern facilities like
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 infrastructure, multispeciality hospitals etc.
Besides
this
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 they can
also
 have a chance to be well-connected with all the main
areas
 of the country.
However
, the population has to face some problems
such
 as pollution, high residential rents and get devoided of their own
people
.
For
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 even though
people
 can go
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mall and enjoy
they
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 will
definetely
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definitely
 miss their loved ones who are far from them and they
also
 have to enjoy themselves and can not
totlaly
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totally
 share their happiness with their beloved ones. Overall, if
people
 can get adjusted
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 a city, they can enjoy a brighter future by accessing all the modern
fcilities
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facilities
. To conclude, the essay has described the reasons behind why the
people
 are moving into the towns despite leaving their homes in the country
areas
.
Also
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 it has explained why
this
 type of situation is more advantageous
fo
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rthe
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the
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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