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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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In today’s
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 we observe that many have a monotonous, single
career
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 and focus on a specific
area
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 of speciality whereas a few try to have multiple careers with different
skills
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. Having
one
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 profession is deemed to be old fashioned and engaging in more than
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 occupation is pinned as the emerging trend. The essay formulated below talks about both of these approaches.
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, it provides my viewpoint with the related arguments. From early days we are being taught that a person should be focused and trained to have a specific skill set as it is the norm. So most people are comfortable engaging in
one
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 profession where they know the inside out. These individuals master the
skills
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 of a particular
area
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 through education
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 as by following a postgraduate degree or by merely through experience.
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, they are able to go higher up in their careers by becoming specialists in a certain domain. The latest trend
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 observed by many is that they experiment by involving in more than
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 occupation where the required
skills
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 can be miles apart. At
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 an individual would study and qualify in a distinct sector of interest. After which the person would work in the same sector for some time and after it becomes boring and uninteresting
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 they would look at other
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 options available. After selecting another
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then
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 these persons would study
further
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 in that
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.
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, these individuals have
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 and experience in working
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along
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 a number of different professions.
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 will be both challenging and interesting. In conclusion, I prefer having a single
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 where I can excel and expertise myself in a specific
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 of interest and grow in my
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 as opposed to having several specialities. The path an individual needs to take purely depends on what they want to pursue and their interests.
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