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Some people think that teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Other believe that teenager should focus on subjects they are the best at or they are most interested in. To what extend do you agree?

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Schooling is one of the important phases of life. At the initial level of study, it is essential that
students
 get familiar with all the subjects rather than concentrating on the selected topics. In my view, it is always better to have a holistic view, compare to a limited one. And, based on a thorough understanding,
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students
 can always opt for their interesting line.
in addition
 to the above,
firstly
, teenagers are not enough matured to make a decision that what subject is best for them and should opt for.
Secondly
, if they don't explore all the topics, how they can decide which one is more interesting compared to others.
Furthermore
, it is highly advisable for
students
 to gain knowledge of all the subjects in order to enhance their personality and skills.
For example
, in school, they always emphasise all the lectures
such
 as Maths, History, Geography, Science, English, even including
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 activities that are equally significant for developing student's mindset.
Subsequently
, would like to highlight that for
students
 with limited knowledge, it might be challenging to compete with today's world, which might lead to failure.
In addition
 to that after schooling, if they want to pursue some other field, it will be very difficult for them to do so. As in that scenario, they might need to study a respective subject from scratch and that could delay their career progress. In summary, it is always better to go for a complete education rather than be selective at the school level.
Thereafter
,
students
 will have a broader perspective to go with the desire.
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