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Some people say that children no longer need to go to school since everything can be learned online. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #children #school
Nowadays, the world has been faced with
a lots
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 of issues caused by Covid-19. Everything has to get new plans to deal with it, including
learning
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 environment. Almost
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all school
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school
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schools
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 in the world allow
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 to learn online at home. Distance learning is convenient but
also
 has many drawbacks. The downside of e-learning is self-discipline. If
you’re not has
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 any motivation to
self learning
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, you will be distracted by anything around you. It not only
disrupt
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 the transmission of knowledge from educators to learners but
also
 make some knowledge gaps between each
learners
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. Learning at home without supervision might be caused the cheating behave which is really hard to control even being at school.
Therefore
, teachers can not know exactly about your academic abilities
each
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subjects
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subject
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. Another bad point of learning at home is too much time spent in front of a computer screen may be harmful, especially to your eyes. Day by day, it might be caused some health problems. But bad things, distance learning
also
 has some good points. The
first
 one is convenient and flexible. Learners can access information from anywhere, anytime.
Furthermore
, distance is no longer a barrier to learning, whether academic or professional if you want to join
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a foreign class. It is simple, useful, learning becomes easier when aligned with one’s learning needs and preferences. Training your self-discipline will become the plus point if you can prevent yourself from bad
behavior
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. In conclusion, everything always has two sides good or bad. Depending on your awareness it’s would help you
getting
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 better or even worse.
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