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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world ?

#development #tourism #english #language #world #people
According to some
people
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 growth of tourism industries
resulted
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English
 as
a
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 international
language
 but some other
people
 believes it will result in the progress of only one
subjects
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instead
 of
othersm
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others
 In
this
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assay
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 I will explain the constructive and destructive ideas related to the statements and I strongly believe that we need both local and international
languages
.
Moreover
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 in the
world
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 there are lakhs of local
languages
 and dialect makes
the
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communication more complex.
In addition
, using single
languages
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language
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 connect the culture and civilization Of
people
.
On the other hand
, global
language
impart
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 commercial success because it will generate word into a single entity.
In addition
, everyone can travel and explore different places and they can make
direct
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the direct
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 relationship between local
people
 with a recognised
language
.
For
example
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 recently there are plenty of travellers and YouTube videos presenting the speciality of different countries all these bloggers using
English
 as a medium of instruction and it
enhance
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people
's attitude towards the world. Reportedly, many
people
 criticize that the rise of
English
 talking
destroy
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 the purity of vernacular subjects.
Consequently
, parents always like to teach their children global trends
instead
 of their own
language
.
As a result
, the culture and
value
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values
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 of the society not only impart new generation but
also
result
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 Western lifestyle.
Besides
, all
this
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 local
languages
 uphold the history and development of mankind went for
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forgetful thoughts. To illustrate
this
, in
India
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 there are more than
thousand
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languages
 and 22 official
languages
.
Innorder
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In order
Inorder
 to protect professional subjects government considered mother tongue
is
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as
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 the
first
languages
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language
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 and every school
students
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 should learn
this
. In conclusion, human beings need communication ,without
this
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 no one can exist in
this
 society .We need
English
 for connecting
People
 globally and at the same
time
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 we should learn our own
language
 because it is our identity of existence.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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