Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don't. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.
Sports has been with people
in
many years. Some individuals take as an example sportsman. Some humans support that professional athletes Change preposition
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nice role models for teenagers but others think that it is wrong. I strongly believe that Change the verb form
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sportpersons
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a mentor
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the youngster
a youngster
youngster
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First
of all, when a kid begins to grow up, she's going to need someone to guide her. Therefore
, she's going to look for someone to idolize herself. This
idol, maybe an actor, maybe a singer or an athlete. If this
mentor is sportswomen
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sportswoman
such
as Eda Erdem Dündar, she wants to be a professional volleyball player. Also
, if she discovers that she is good at volleyball because of this
situation, she may be a very useful player for her country in the future. On this
basis, some people think that competitors are the best guide for infants.
On the other hand
, some kids were born with
gravely disabled. For Change preposition
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this
reason, they cannot do any kind of sports. This
situation, make them feel sad. When they look at television, People who play sports can get upset when they see it and think about why I'm like this
and think of severe depression. Also
, this
case can be upset for their parents as they do not want their children to think like that. According to them, their children are the best actor or singer
for them.
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everything that has been stated so far, professional athletes can encourage many by showcasing their Add a comma
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attempt
and long haul. From my point of view, Athletes who have always done good work and won numerous medals throughout their careers set a good example for Fix the agreement mistake
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