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Some people say that ebook and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Reading news online has been vogue among
people
However
 it is considered by few folks that online books will completely change the way of reading as compared to the past .
although
people
 will use more ebooks. I still believe that the value of newspapers and
magazines
 will not change. To commence with, the primary reason why
people
 will read
magazines
 and print media. since reading
magazines
 continuously is difficult for readers. it puts determine impact not only on health but
also
 on the eyes. the New York Times reported in March 2016 that around 67% of
people
 had back masses troubles who used to read news on phone. despite having internet access
people
 will not change their habit of reading either
magazines
 or newspapers.
In addition
 to
this
, easy to carry is another reason why
people
 will prefer to read the newspaper. Even though
people
 can carry cell phones easily, some time internet is not working in hilly areas.
However
,
people
 can enjoy reading with hard copy anytime anywhere in the world. To epitomizes, in Himachal Pradesh which is a hill station in India, where networks do not work well
people
 may face problems while reading.
hence
, undoubtedly technology has developed a lot in the recent years and it will better in future but no one can promise network well in any weather conditions. In conclusion, if individuals read any news on mobile phones
then
 it will
puts
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 on
the
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 direct impact on the eyes . They can not use easily every time.
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